Everyone has a dream.
Children have a dream.
Adults have a dream.
I have a dream.
And you have a dream.
We are surrounded in dreams.
Dreams occur constantly.
During the day.
At night.
Sunrise.
And sunset.
We never stop dreaming.
There's always something we want,
But seems impossible to have.
Some dreams are so big,
That we see them as a fairy-tale.
If people went after their dreams,
Our world would be much happier.
Less greedy.
But we don't,
Because we are scared.
Weak.
And timid.
Those who follow their dreams.
Achieve them.
The ones who sit back and do nothing,
don’t.
Why have a dream if you're not even going to try to follow it?
You know what that is?
That's like having a brilliant idea and not telling anyone about it.
Ignoring your dreams,
is like giving up on a whole life's worth of opportunities.
Ignoring your dreams,
is foolish.
i love that last part where you said that ignoring your dreams is foolish because it's true. Dreams are very important and you surely got that poing across. It is kind of "choppy" (sorry Mr. Johnson)
ReplyDeleteI really like this. You describe dreams very well, like how we are too scared to follow our dreams. I especially like the second-to-last stanza.
ReplyDeleteThere is a nice, positive message in this poem. I would recommend using repetition more, and see if there are some concrete images you could include to make the poem more vivid. There are techniques in poetry that you can become more familiar with to help you write more challenges pieces as you forge ahead. Well done.
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